Character Sheet: Ryukenden Atrineas

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Second Incarnation: Ryukenden Atrineas [from Nov. 17, 2005 - it’s the second sheet on the first post.]

Note: I changed the *s to #s, because I feel it organizes better. The correction, like spelling corrections, does not alter the score at the end in any way.

Name: Ryukenden Atrineas
Nickname/Title: Son of the Goddesses / Rurouni of Fire

For those who don’t know, Rurouni roughly means Wandering Swordsman or Wandering Masterless Samurai.

From what little research I did, the creator of Ruroni Kenshin seems to have made that word. It was apparently created by combining the verb ru (to wander) and Ronin, which means Masterless Samurai. I don’t care to nitpick too much on this point – probably because it’s early on in the character sheet – so I didn’t look it up in extensive detail.

Gender: Male
Age: 5 years (Post-Ocarina of Time)
Race: Hylian
Height: 6'2"
Weight: 247 lbs.
Birthdate: Unclear
Family: Din, Nayru, and Farore

Apparently, we’re scrapping the idea that he needed a childhood, and he’s just been wandering around, created at – according to the somewhat informal consensus of Link’s age in Ocarina of Time – seventeen. I will begrudgingly give some credit to listing his age in terms of years of existence, not how old he appears to be.

Of course, he still has his three goddess mommies. I still fail to see how that makes sense. Maybe it will be better explained in this character sheet.

(And maybe I’ll be struck by lightning.)

Physical Description: A tall, strong young man. His long, white hair has shadows of yellow and orange; giving the appearance it is made of pure, intense flames. It cascades from his head, flowing out in the wind and falling to his lower back. It is down fully, not tied back in any way. His bangs flow from the top of his forehead and down past the sides of his face like long, fountains of flame. More hair flows forth in front of his ears and ends just past the bottom of his chest.

I normally wouldn’t say this, but I despise the following sentence: “His long, white hair has shadows of yellow and orange; giving the appearance it is made of pure, intense flames.”

He copies-and-pastes it into character sheets and role-plays alike. It appears verbatim in anything that introduces and/or describes him. First, yellow and orange do not speak to me of intense flames. White does, yes, because it is the color of intense flame. So is blue. Second, if you use a description so often that you just copy-and-paste it into everything, you’ve ruined whatever poetry or intensity the line originally had.

I’m sorry, but I really had to say it.

As for the rest... he’s described the hair in what I assume is detail, but I didn’t get anything out of it but it’s long, it isn’t tied back, and it looks like fire if fire had the flowing properties of water. I honestly have to force myself to read it. It’s boring and I don’t want to.

His narrow, shining midnight blue eyes reveal his deep emotions, although they hold a serious stare. They glisten like the purest of sapphires, like the vast ocean at the crack of dawn.

Urg. This is borderline purple prose. The only things that are really stopping it are the facts that it still makes more sense than purple prose and it doesn’t have terrible strings of adjectives and adverbs.

For the sake of a brief character sheet for people to reference before they start role-playing with you, you could say he has dark, expressive blue eyes. Descriptive writing is nice, but save the fancy writing for role-playing and story-telling.

His long, sharp ears are poised outward, ever on alert. His skin is a shade darker than the average Hylian's, much like a "natural tan". His torso's frame is wide, but not unattractively, around the ribs and pelvis but slimmer at the waist. His chest is massive with deep, full muscles that are apparent even under his clothes. His 6-pack, hard-core abs are not totally visible from under his clothes, but they can be easily felt. However, without a shirt, they portray a trim, but hard wall of muscle. Around his torso are a lot of smaller muscles, woven between his ribs that are also visible, but stop where they meet his smooth muscles at the rear-sides. His shoulders are very broad and well rounded, showing apparently separated muscles that the pecs and biceps attach to. He has long and powerful arms. His biceps are very large and full, his triceps are very apparent. He has thin wrists, which seem to emphasize his big hands, which have large palms with long thick fingers. On the back of his left hand, the Symbol of Din shines with an orange light. His long legs continue to deliver the mighty warrior style appearance. They are thick with muscle as well, visibly showing the longer muscles on top. They provide excellent support and power. Their length takes up more than half of his whole height. His feet are rather large, but not unattractively. They have excellent balance and support and are strong and endurant for constant walking, which is a good thing for him.

I'm really not sure what word "endurant" should be, but "endurant" is not a word.

Perhaps consider changing it to, "...and are strong, with enough stamina to endure his constant walking."

I'll say it again: This kind of description really isn't suited for a character sheet. Really, it isn't even suited for a story, because it's very dull to read. Gigantic blocks of description on such a minute topic are rarely interesting. In fact, I can't think of one description this long on a topic so small as a person's muscles that was entertaining.

Though, I'm glad I forced myself to read it. Because I read that description, I caught two uses of descriptors of what might be seen as flaws (big feet and a wide frame) followed by "though not unattractively." What is attractive is largely subjective. It is a cheap descriptor to say that something is attractive or not attractive. Other characters should be able to decide that. Unless he's an incubus, or something, and people are unnaturally attracted to him, of course.

Clothing 1: His ears hold two long black crystal earrings that hang from a gold piece, hitching to his ears. Knee-high, stiff, straight brown boots that look tough and sturdy, yet form-fitting. The toe and heel of these boots are covered in metal. His white pants are a bit loose, but they're kept up well with a belt in the same red as the stone Jasper. On this belt, two small/medium packs are attached. His hands and forearms are covered by form-fitting gauntlets. They are brown at the hands, but black at the forearms. a brownish-red armor plate protects the backs of the forearms as well. Around his neck is a necklace of what would normally be the forehead jewel on a Gerudo, this one being yellow. A second belt of the same color is around his waist, but this one holds a sheath and that sheath holds a sword. He's shirtless, so his strong muscles can be seen.

Honestly, I don't get the point of wearing any form of armor, if he's not going to even wear a shirt. Moreover, not everyone knows what red jasper looks like. In fact, because jasper comes in a variety of colors, some people may not think of jasper as red.

That aside, red jasper comes in varying shades from vibrant to dark.

Basically, I'm making a big to-do about the fact that it's a poor descriptor. This is probably because it's better than criticizing the rest of that. As always, it's a bit too long and uninteresting.

Clothing 2: Very simple in style, this outfit is meant to be worn in towns and cities without drawing too much attention to himself. His head is bare, but his left ear carries a silver hoop ring. His undershirt is white with long sleeves. The sleeves are tight on his wrists, then flare out around his hand though the shirt itself is a little baggy, if Ryo tenses his muscles enough, one could see it. Over this is a red v-neck sleeveless shirt. His pants are dark red and are held up by a black belt with a golden buckle. His boots are brown and form-fitting. His pant-legs cover the boots until they reach the foot of them.

“if Ryo tenses his muscles enough, one could see it.” – See what, exactly? His muscles? That the sleeves are tight around the wrists?

At least this description is somewhat brief. I’m sure it could be trimmed down a bit further, though, without ruining too much of the description.

Clothing 3: On his head, a royal red long hat is set securely over his hair.

Is “royal red” a shade, or is it a royal long hat that is also red? If the former, I’m not familiar with that shade of red, but I assume it’s a very rich and solid color. If it is the latter, I have no idea what kind of long cap it is.

It extends down to his bottom, all the way embroidered with golden designs of swirls and wings like that of the royal family crest. Across his forehead is a prince tiara of gold. In the center, the piece is straight and rests on the top of his nose. As it raises up, it widens and curls outwards and down. Between the two curves is a large, bright red ruby. On top of that is a tall golden feather-like piece. On the sides of the curves and connecting to the hat are a series of golden leaves. Clasping to the lobes of his ears are gold-studded earrings that carry long black crystals that dangle from the apple-core shaped studs.

There are so many things in his description of his “prince tiara” that I’m not sure where to start.

First of all, “prince tiara” is a stupid phrase.

I did a quick define:tiara search on Google. It is either a lady’s headdress, a papal crown, or a high crown that is conical in shape (which is related to the papal crown, in some fashion).

A circlet – which is a form of crown – is a decorated band of metal that goes around the head. It is more gender-neutral and is not as elaborate as a full-blown crown of any sort.

The descriptions are also confusing to me. I had to read it several times to figure out even vaguely what it’s meant to look like. It isn’t even terribly necessary to describe in a character sheet.

As a final note, if I had a band of metal that rested on the bridge of my nose, it would bother the hell out of me.

The layer of clothes touching is skin is composed of a black body-suit that is of the richest and purest of black. It reaches from his slightly below the ankles and slightly past the wrists to his neck, which is open more widely and split in the front as goes up his neck. The trim is thin, but golden in color.
Over this body-suit is a tunic shaped suit of silver chainmail for secure protection.

Okay, I was going to ask why he had black long johns on at all times, but I don’t care about that, anymore.

A “tunic shaped suit of silver chainmail?”

DO SOME GOD DAMN RESEARCH YOU TWAT.

Here is a rough image of a tunic:

Here is an image of a hauberk:

A hauberk is chain armor that reaches to nearly the knee in a tunic shape. Learn about what you’re writing. Until then, I reserve the right to call you an idiot.

If you just put “chainmail,” that would’ve been fine, too. You didn’t even need to use the word ‘hauberk.’ Everyone would have known what you meant.

What, you just apparently assumed we were all stupid? That we thought a suit of chainmail armor came only in the sexist variety of the chainmail bikini, or something?

You described what the chainmail looked like and then showed how little you know about the feckin’ armor your character wears. You are an ignoramus.

Normally, I wouldn’t let my emotions get the better of me to this extent, but it needed saying. Fuck you. Do some goddamn research. (“hur hur, the She Elf’s point is invalid because she called names and swore and lost her temper” — fuck you, too, if you think that.)

(God, I hate this character sheet.)

A royal red thick strip of firm cloth is draped over him with a hole in the center for his head to come through. The thick strip travels down his chest and back. It is secured in place by a gold-leaf belt with a ruby in the center of it. The strip itself has the Triforce symbol on the abdominal area and the middle of his back. Below the belt is the phoenix part of the Royal Family's crest in front. The strip ends just past the chainmail tunic in a point in back, but extends lower to be just above his knees in front. On the sides of the chainmail tunic's skirt is a gathering of royal red cloth connecting from the front of the belt to the back.

Is… he trying to describe a tabard? (that is, “a short sleeveless outer tunic emblazoned with a coat of arms; worn by a knight over his armor or by a herald”)

You know what? I don’t really care, anymore. There isn’t a need to describe so many outfits in such detail for a character sheet. I think we all know that characters don’t typically wear the same thing 100% of the time.

Over his hands and forearms are long form-fitting gauntlets. The hands are brick-red and fingerless. The forearms are thicker in material and black.
His legs rest comfortably inside tall brick-red knee-high boots. They, too, are form-fitting. They don't, however, bare any real detail.
As if all this wasn't enough, he bares golden armor on top of this apparel. His upper torso is protected by a golden breastplate and backplate. In the middle of the front, details of a bird can be seen with a bright ruby in its head. This bird is much like the one on Zelda's armor. His shoulders are covered with two joined pieces of gold armor. The first piece sticks straight out with thick trim and swirl details. The second piece curve inward first, holding a bright red ruby there, and then extends downward on the outside of his upper arms.
On the back of his gauntlets are golden long plates of gold with thick trim and details like his shoulder armor. They are held onto his gauntlets by brick-red straps. His shin-guards are of the exact same style, and so are the footguards on top of his feet. Those connect to his boots by golden straps.
To finish the outfit as a whole, a long, flowing royal red cape flares behind him from the middle of his backplate. On the back is a golden symbol of the Royal Family Crest. The trim of the cape is golden as well. Along the left and right sides of the cape, one could see darker red symbols of the Six Sages vertically lined.

Clothing 4: His ears hold two long black crystal earrings that hang from a gold piece, hitching to his earlobes.
His torso is covered by a rather tight light gray, long-sleeve shirt. the neck of the shirt comes up around his own neck and has a tie string on the front. However, he always has it untied. There are visible stitches on the outside of the arms, as if it had torn near the bicep area in the past. His lower body's garment is a pair of tan pants The pants have large, visible stitches on the inside and outside of the legs. The pants are snug on all parts of his legs.
Over this is a textured red tunic. The trim is no different in color, but careful stitching and embroidery make an obvious border around the skirt, sleeves, and neck. The skirt opens at the sides to his hips to allow for more free movement of the legs. The sleeves are stitched with large stitches on the outside to the shoulder.
Over his feet and lower legs are knee-high form-fitting dark brown boots. They have stitching on the inward side. They have nice rubbery, textured bottoms for good traction. It looks like the foot of the boots are in two parts, horizontally.
Over his hands and forearms are long, gauntlets. The hands are fingerless and brown. The forearm is black and made of thicker material. On the back of both of his forearms are brown, textured metal plates strapped on.
Around his waist to show off how trim his body is underneath all those layers of clothes is a jasper-red belt with a golden ornate buckle. This belt holds three small bags to his backside, two on his left side, one on his right side. A second belt is strapped around the left side of his chest and is diagonal down to the right side of his lower torso. A secondary supporting belt is attached to this and wraps around the left side of his mid-lower torso. On this belt is where the sheath for his sword is attached.

Clothing 5: Nothing is on his head, as he lets his long, fiery hair flow. His ears hold two long black crystal earrings that hang from a gold piece, hitching to his ears. The garments that touch his skin are very simple. A pure white, long-sleeved shirt that hugs his arms fits nicely over his youthfully strong body. He wears pure white trousers which are snug on his long legs. Over these is a pure white tunic with sky blue rose¹ embroidery at the edges of the sleeves, skirt, and neck. Over his torso is a unique work of armor. A solid white breastplate that protects his chest connects to a hard white backplate that protects behind his shoulder blades.

I think we can all guess what breastplate and backplate does. I take offense to your character sheet treating me like I’m stupid when I actually bother to read this useless mess.

Also, who wears breastplate without backplate? I'm pretty sure you only need to say breastplate.

All over them are decorative swirls² embossed on the armor. Holding onto his sides are sectioned pieces of white armor, also containing such wind-like swirls. Because they're sectioned, they allow the wearer to move side to side easily and still be protected. In front and back is a multi-sectioned piece of armor that allows for forward and backward bending. This piece in front is a light yellow, much like Ryo's hair. On his shoulders are oval-shaped white plated of curved armor. These are held on by white belts with silver buckles around his upper arms. Each have a mark like what Gorons have on their shoulders³. Attached to a white belt, a set of dragon-scale-like armor skirt protects around the upper legs. In front, two belts cross over and meet at a circular metal piece to protect... well, what a man wants to have protected in battle... The gauntlets are light yellow and cover his hands and forearms. The base of the gauntlet ends in a point that even protect the joint of his elbow. They are fingerless, form-fitting, and quite attractive. His boots are the choicest of all footwear among knights. A single sheet of white armor covers the shin in each boot. They also bear the decorative wind patterns. At the calf, two curved pieces of armor give the leg a stunningly accurate and sexy shape, showing great strength with sleekness. The ankles are covered with a tiny circular shield-like piece of armor. The heel of the boot is carefully covered in armor, as it the toe. The part in top has a flexible but tough multi-layers fabric. Around his neck is a white cape that is held in place by a single ruby. The cape flows out like the wind and at its edges are embroidered light blue roses. On his forehead is a prince-like tiara. This tiara follows the cheekbones and curves inward. At brow-level, a new piece of metal connects the two pieces at the sides of his face with a ruby in the middle. All the metal seems to have a slight reddish shadow to it, as if still hot from being forged.

Clothing 6: With nothing on his head, he lets his long flowing hair flare in the wind. His ears hold a golden piece that clings to long black crystals for earrings. His hands grip fingerless black gloves that are wrist-length. He has white bandage wrappings around his forearms. They are tight at his wrist, but end up being more loose at his elbows. His pants are very baggy and black, being tied in place by a red cloth like a belt. His shoes are a curious design, for they don't seem like shoes at all. Toughened fabrics and lining allow a more sock-like piece of apparel to be proper footwear, for this dark sock separates the big toe from the rest, allowing a black armor piece to cover the top of the foot and have a band be between those toes. It is also ideal for rope-climbing. A black shinguard covers the front of his shins and a more rounded piece protects his knees. The baggy pants puff out and sag behind these armor pieces, stopping at the knee, for the rest of them is inside the knee-high sock-like footwear and armor. At times, he wears a light gray "tank-top" kind of shirt that has a low neckline and huge open sports for the arms. (This is known today as a "Muscle shirt"). Most times, though, he doesn't bother with the shirt and just shows off his torso.

Weapons: Though it has no name, Ryo has a simple-styled sword that's been with him for about 4 years or more, which is most of his life. The old trusty sword is made of steel and seems to be crafted from one piece. The hilt is wrapped in brown leather. The blade is long, but not too heavy. It's been used and sharpened numerous times, so it looks a little worn. However, it works like a charm.
His weapon varies from story to story, but is generally his starting weapon.

This weapon description probably has the least amount of problems in it out of all the other descriptions. There are still some extra unnecessary details tucked in (like “which is most of his life,” for example), but those are easily forgiven because I’m finally done with the clothing.

Personality: Calm and quiet for the most part. He's not one to have mood swings, because whatever mood he's in tends to stay with him a while. He's quick to joy and easily snapped into a survival type behavior, yet slow to anger and sadness takes a bit to settle in. Needless to say, joy and sadness last longer with him than anger.
He's protective of people he cares for and he'll jump into a situation where he'll want to protect people he doesn't even know from those who are doing wrong against them. Given that the evildoers are generally Stalfos, it's easy to see who he'll side with.
The emotion he's felt the most is loneliness. He's had temporary traveling buddies before, but he's never had someone who'd stick around with him.
One emotion he'd never thought he'd have is deep love. He's met many women in his travels, but none who come to him seem to captivate his heart... mainly because those who generally come to him sought self-gain in being with him.

I’d imagine he’s bet many women in his travels, yes. Women make up about half of the population. In some places in Hyrule, it’s much more than that (note: the Gerudo). Or does “met many women” in conjunction with “love” mean something else?

Not that it would be unheard of for a wanderer to bed women and leave shortly thereafter. Actually, one would assume the opposite.

And it really isn’t like someone who doesn’t stay in the same place for very long has the chance to fall in love. Seriously, that’s a ridiculous detail. Love doesn’t just pop out of nowhere. If he isn’t really willing to stick around anywhere, he can’t really be surprised when people don’t really stick around for him.

As an additional note, his personality contradicts itself.

“He's not one to have mood swings, because whatever mood he's in tends to stay with him a while.” =/= “He's quick to joy and easily snapped into a survival type behavior, yet slow to anger and sadness takes a bit to settle in.”

Powers: For because Din had given him power in his restoration, Ryo can blow fire out his mouth like a Dragon. Not necessarily a power but must be noted, his body temperature is higher than normal.

Strengths: Ryo's element of fire is a part of him, not an added magic. His power grows stronger in heated areas. He also heals himself faster in heat. Fire has little to no ill effect on him, for in most cases, it actually heals him. He's strong physically and mentally. He has quite interesting ways of looking at situations and creativeness seems to be on his side.

Weaknesses: Ryo's element of fire is a part of him, not an added magic. Freezing cold attacks are very VERY damaging to him. It's so devastating to his body that just being in frigid temperatures starts to kill him faster than it would a normal person.

Okay, a lot of the history looks nearly the same as it did in the previous Ryuu character sheet. I won’t be commenting a lot on it, because of this. At least, not until I start seeing significant differences.

History: Seven years after Ganondorf had taken over Hyrule, the Hero of Time had come back to defeat the King of Evil. He explored through the dungeons and had defeated Phantom Ganon in the Forest Temple as well as Volvagia in the Fire Temple.

The Water Temple was next, but it proved perilous for Link. Water levels rising and lowering was a hassle and the whole place was littered with villainous beasts. Link was able to easily counter-act these creatures of the cursed dungeon, but there was one thing Link hadn't counted on fighting... himself.

When Link had entered the Water Temple, the source of the curse took notice of his arrival. This source, called Morpha, knew that if Link had gotten to it, it'd surely die. Morpha knew it wasn't much capable of defending itself, for it relied on its magical powers to cause the will of Ganondorf to become true. In this thought, Morpha copied Link's body with its mythical abilities. The copy was a complete and perfect copy of Link in every way except one... Though he had muscle, he had no strength. Though his heart was strong, it was silent. No air moved in his lungs. It was complete, but yet lacking. The copy came into this world dead. To Morpha, this didn't matter. It only needed two things from this creation... the essences of Anger and Hatred. These, it extracted with ease and formed them together in a more solid, yet phantom-like figure. This figure was Morpha's plan to stop the Hero of Time from going any further.

Link progressed through the Water Temple without serious affliction at first. The tables seemed to turn when he entered a room which seemed to be a grayish, hazy place that had a slight resemblance to outside Lake Hylia. He passed the single tree in the center and raced to a building that seemed like the fishing hut. The door wouldn't open, no matter how hard Link pushed or pulled. Giving up on the door for now, he turned around to find a black figure leaning on the tree. This figure looked exactly like him, but all coal black - hair, clothes, skin, everything - except for the flaming red, demon eyes. The figure glanced at him with a smile capable of unsettling Twinrova. Before words could be spoken, it launched at Link and the two were engaged in combat quickly.

The records tell of the battle between Link and his dark self... but what of the body? The copy in which that dark form was made...? Morpha left him behind, seeing as he was useless to it. On this moment, the Goddesses of Hyrule - Din, Nayru and Farore - looked down upon him with pity. This lifeless body, this soulless man should have more than to be just a leftover to a sinister plan. It concerned Din, saddened Farore and broke Nayru's heart to see such waste... an innocent person being created for the sole purpose of destroying another. Nayru was in tears as she had such pity for him. Farore also felt terrible that even a monster had no feelings. However sorry they felt, it was nothing compared to Din's anger of these events. Ganondorf had gone too far. Din made a promise to Nayru and Farore that this one would live and be a directly-created man by their power. In essence, she promised them that this one would be their son. Nayru and Farore instantly agreed, but they had to wait until the essences that were taken had returned to the body.

Link bested his phantom, and the Dark Link form dissipated into nothing but the essences. They returned to their host and just as promised, the three Goddesses went to work, singing all the while.

Taking him into their own hands, they lifted the copy into the air. Farore was first to give her gift to the man. She breathed into him the breath of life and pressed the center of his chest. By doing this, his breathing began and his heart pumped. with this action, the body became living. Nayru, then, blessed him knowledge and wisdom. He gained learning for basic living and survival... all one would need to get by. In a sense, she gave him the natural instincts any human would have. Din formed in her mighty hands a sphere of fire. Enveloping the man in these flames, he became infused with the element of fire. Power was given to him, for his muscles now carried strength in them. To finish their work of life, the trio focused their powers onto him, forming a new soul in which would inhabit this body as their son - the Child of the Triforce.

They knew their works for this one's life was completed, but one should not go into the world as an exact copy of someone else. Each individual should have their own traits and unique appearance. This one would be no exception. They began to form him to their own desired form. The Hero of Time has a pleasing base, but one should not copy him, and for that they scolded Morpha's lack of originality. Din stroked his hair gently and intense white, flaming locks overpowered the gold that was once there. Nayru brushed his face, deepening the blue of his shimmering eyes. Farore did not think color was enough, for she began to lengthen his ears and sharpen their form and their performance. Din saw Farore's plans and began to do work of her own. She enlarged his hands and gave to them a grip which one would have to wrestle him to make him let go. She enlarged his feet for firmly standing his ground, endurance for long travels, a powerful kick, and great running. Nayru thought performance and power were nice, but he needed another kind of touch. She lengthened his legs for more speed, yet also to add attractiveness... for his legs take up about half his height. She sharpened the facial features, also trying to add attractiveness and style. His hair became longer, down to the back of his shoulder blades. Having their work done, Din kissed the man's left hand, leaving her symbol there to replace the hollow shadow of the Triforce of Courage.

They had also erased the memories of fighting Link as Dark Link. Such knowledge at this given time would only bring confusion and horror. Any knowledge of what had happened was gone except for dreams that occurred on occasional nights. Sadly enough, he also does not know of his origin in any way... this means he does not know that the Goddesses are technically his mothers... but he does know the name they had given him - Ryukenden, which means Dragon. He likes the shorter version, Ryo - which he refers to himself as to this day.

When he awakened on that day, Morpha was dead. Link had already left the Water Temple. He knew not where he was or how he came to be. All he knew was that he was in a great room... alone. Not wanting to waste away in this prison, he found the door and exited the Water Temple. On his own, he left Hyrule... not knowing what to expect of this new world...

...Five years passed since Ganondorf was defeated. Ryo returned to Hyrule after being away from his birthplace for so long. He's gained new apparel and weapons since his beginning journey. His hair has grown long and he's built up his muscles a little since then as well. He returned with hopes of finding out his past... finding out who he really is... and why he can't remember anything past two years ago. Little did he know that upon his arrival, his life would change forever.

…did we seriously just spend all that time on his origin and then skip the majority of his life with absolutely no detail except that he’s bulked up a bit? And that’s a good question, why he can’t remember anything past two years prior. Did he get amnesia, again, after the first three years wandering? (He left before Ganondorf was defeated. He came back five years later, but only has two years of memory.)

Extra: Because Ryo was a copy of Link to start with, he already had Link's athletic abilities and skills to begin with. Since he had left Hyrule, he gained teachings from others and he began to get his own style of fighting. Even though he gained some weight training, his body began to expand in his muscle structure on its own, which he cannot explain. No one in Hyrule but him knows about the history of his blade. But something no one but the Goddesses know, is just who this man truly is.

I like the inexplicable expanding muscle structure. It’s like the only reason that was added in was to put in another difference between Ryuu and Link to try to make everyone forget “Ryo is a copy of Link.”

-Knight Armor-
¹A blue rose in the land of Shantiosia is a symbol of mercy. The rose being with thorns is a symbol of delicate yet surprisingly harmful being. The blue color is to symbolize water, which can either be a provider of life or a judge of destruction. Flowers on a tunic of a knight may not seem "manly", but those who are well learned in the decor of a warrior's apparel, they know there is much these roses are feared for and only those worthy can bear them.

Fun fact: I can’t really find any information on Shantiosia. The most I can find is a brief mention on his forum calling it some sort of desert land. This is obviously because non-canon information doesn’t need any explanation while well-known canon information needs long recaps.

Also, nothing about Ryuu strikes me as a delicate being at all. And I’ve never found roses to be unmanly. They’ve appeared on coats of arms and can mean a number of things. A plain rose can mean hope and joy, or be the mark of the seventh son. A red rose means grace and beauty, a white rose means love and faith. These are not inherently feminine things and didn’t merely appear on coats of arms for women.

Actually, I don’t think there were many coats-of-arms for women.

²Decorative swirls on armor are more than just artistic, for they are actually a symbol of swiftness and dexterity. It means that the one who wears the armor has the agility of the wind's bend. Since wind can change direction and form around any obstacle, the wind symbols on armor is often one that strikes fear into the opponents, yet is attractive to allies.

³Having marking like a Goron is a symbol of strength and physical power. It tells others that the wearer is capable of heavy damaging blows, with or without a weapon.

RPG Style: Zelda RPG

This gets a 2/10.

The character is a massive Mary Sue – and I will be doing the test for it, later.

The descriptions for the clothing are long, unnecessary, and make reading the character sheet a chore. If he has so many different outfits, why bother putting it on the sheet at all? Just give brief descriptors of his clothing in the actual role-play.

The character sheet also has plenty unnecessary details (like what his chestplate covers, as though the audience will assume it covers his ass, or something). Putting in these details gives the character sheet the quality of assuming the reader is too stupid to come to a basic conclusion correctly. I, for one, don’t like reading a character sheet that assumes I’m a moron. This is especially true in this case – when I clearly can tell I know more than the writer of the sheet.

Which brings me to my next point. Do some research. It isn’t hard. Know the parts of the armor you’re going to describe in full detail. If you don’t think the reader will understand, include a list of basic diagrams of armor and weapons on your forum so that people role-playing will have some references. Not doing proper research shows that you don’t care that much about your character.

Or, that you don’t care enough to put in the work.

Finally, it references information that is not in canon and is not known. For example, Shantiosia. I searched around and the only information I can find on the place comes from Ryuu’s forum – in passing. It’s just some desert place. That’s all I know.

Instead of reminding the audience about canon information, you should remember to add a link or some sort of extra information about the non-canon places that you make up. I don’t even know what other significance Shantiosia is supposed to have to Ryuu or why he has a blue rose from their culture on his armor.

Likewise, none of the other decorations on his armor are explained in the history. I don’t know why I’m complaining about that, since this sheet was a pain to read, anyway, but it’s something unexplained that raises questions. It’s lack of explanation is not excused by an overabundance of detail in other areas.

On top of all those regular flaws, the history still has the questions raised from the previous Ryuu character sheet and the character is still a Link clone, even without the “looks most like” section.

I cannot be nice about this. This does not deserve a softened score.